Writing Task

 This Week we had to do a task about our writing that would be marked and here it is 

The Whisper- Xavier

On the most beautiful sunny day I thought I could stroll to the lagoon and have a swim. My Dad had warned me not to go but I don't know what he's talking about. I know that some people have gone missing but still I think it's a really nice day and people go missing at all different beaches but today nothing could go wrong.

 I drove there. It was perfect, the light breeze of the air, the saltiness in my nose, the calm almost silent beach with a nice sunny sky. I was like a racoon finding trash. I hopped in and just as I thought it was the perfect temperature for swimming in nice cool water with the beautiful sun beaming on me I had been swimming like a swan having the best day of my life. There was a tire swing that you could swing on. I was like a monkey. I had a nice coke on the sand then hopped back in. It was the clearest water i've ever seen. I just swam around  but then the sun started to set so I was ready to go home but then dark stormy clouds came like lightning. It filled the sky with dread.

 I peered above as the wind picked up. trees that were swaying so fast it was like whispering. Then I felt something touch my leg and then I felt more and more and more. Like thousands of arms pulling me down I started sinking. I went under the water as I heard whispering. I then kicked the arms as I was drowning. As I started to sink I saw lots of people. But not alive, they were ghosts!  I thought that I was going to be one of them. They disappeared as I saw the rain had stopped. I swam up as fast as I could I saw the surface I swam up as fast as a swordfish and beached myself on land as I vomited all the water that was inside me I nearly died

 I rushed home as I told my Dad he said he sant surprised because that had happened to him too. I said “why didn't you tell me!” Dad replied “I did tell you you just didn't listen!” as I curled up in bed I learnt to always listen to my dad